[D-31] 아이엘츠 공부

리딩 : 20분간 지문읽고 문제 1~13번 풀기

- 10개 정답, 3개 오답

- 틀린 이유:
       문제의 지문을 잘 이해하지 못함(summary 에 해당하는 본문찾기를 잘 못함)
       시간에 대한 압박

 

라이팅 :

- 나의 답변

This bar chart illustrates the percentage of coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia.

 

In, general, the habit which people went to a vafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is the highest rate for the most of cities except Adelaide and other one which people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is the lowest in every cities.

 

Three cities's residents, who are living in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart, have habits that went to a cafe for coffee and tea in last 4 weeks more than 60%. And other habit which buying instant coffee in same period is at 44, 48, and 54%.

 

Brisbane's and Adelaide's residents have less gap between buying fresh coffee and instant one in 4 weeks. But Brisbane people have more percentage for fresh coffee than instant one while Adlelaid people tend to buy instant coffee than fresh coffee.

 

Overall, the most pf people who are living in 5 cities in Australia go to cafe to drink coffee and tea and the least people buy fresh one.

ChatGpt의 평가

Based on the evaluation provided, your writing would likely receive a score in the range of 5.0 to 6.0 for IELTS Task 1.

피드백

Overall, your response provides a brief summary of the information presented in the bar chart. However, there are some grammatical errors and areas where you could improve clarity and organization. Here's a detailed evaluation of your writing with suggestions for improvement:

Introduction:
"This bar chart illustrates the percentage of coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia."
Suggestion: Your introduction is concise and provides the necessary context. However, you could rephrase it slightly for better clarity: "The bar chart presents the percentages of coffee and tea consumption habits in five Australian cities."

Main Body:
"In, general, the habit which people went to a vafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is the highest rate for the most of cities except Adelaide and other one which people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks is the lowest in every city."
Suggestion: This sentence is quite confusing and contains grammatical errors. Here's a revised version: "In general, the highest percentage of people visiting a cafe for coffee or tea in the past four weeks is observed in most cities, except Adelaide. Conversely, the lowest percentage of people purchasing fresh coffee in the past four weeks is consistent across all cities."

Comparison of cities:
"Three cities's residents, who are living in Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, have habits that went to a cafe for coffee and tea in last 4 weeks more than 60%. And other habit which buying instant coffee in same period is at 44, 48, and 54%."
Suggestion: This statement can be improved for clarity and organization. Here's a revised version: "Residents of three cities, namely Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, had the habit of visiting a cafe for coffee and tea in the last four weeks, with percentages exceeding 60%. Additionally, the habit of purchasing instant coffee in the same period was observed at 44%, 48%, and 54% in these cities."

Comparison between Brisbane and Adelaide:
"Brisbane's and Adelaide's residents have less gap between buying fresh coffee and instant one in 4 weeks. But Brisbane people have more percentage for fresh coffee than instant one while Adlelaid people tend to buy instant coffee than fresh coffee."
Suggestion: The comparison between Brisbane and Adelaide can be presented more clearly. Here's a revised version: "In Brisbane and Adelaide, there is a smaller difference between the percentages of fresh coffee and instant coffee purchases in the last four weeks. However, residents of Brisbane have a higher percentage of fresh coffee purchases compared to instant coffee, while Adelaide residents tend to buy more instant coffee than fresh coffee."

Conclusion:
"Overall, the most pf people who are living in 5 cities in Australia go to cafe to drink coffee and tea and the least people buy fresh one."
Suggestion: Your conclusion is brief but lacks clarity. Here's a revised version: "In conclusion, the majority of residents in the five Australian cities prefer consuming coffee and tea in cafes, while a smaller percentage opt for purchasing fresh coffee."

Overall, you have provided a summary of the main features of the chart. However, it's important to work on grammar, clarity, and organization to enhance your response. By implementing the suggested improvements, your writing will become clearer and more precise. Remember to proofread your work to ensure accuracy and coherence.